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[Pin-ups 'n' starters // Bulbasaur //]

Shouldn't she be sliding off of the Bulbasaur? I can see both buttcheeks so that means she's not actually sitting on anything, the leg she has tucked behind him must be broken. Did you get your layers mixed up or something?

Her other foot is level at a side shot but her toes are cocked sideways. You even have the ridge of her foot cutting through that lineup of toes like they really don't belong.

The Bulbasaur's face is completely flat and why is he looking to the top right of his vision but not turning his head to face the woman?

Mojabrantes responds:

You're right, I'll do better next time :)

[Bunny Suit Ari]

Spines can't twist 75 degrees like that. Her breast is dangling over her right buttock. She could touch the front of her left thigh with her right arm by reaching behind.

AngelXMIkey responds:

I liked the reference I used, so I took some liberties to get a good booby to booty ratio. Sorry it bothered you so much not to get you off.

[Bad Morning]

I got your PM so here's my review.

Very classic Newgrounds humor. My advice is to make lines more straight for objects like tables & walls, the table top is angled differently than the table leg. If you're gonna use the same shot twice I'd recommend copying and pasting the same assets just for sake of efficiency save for the things that are meant to be different.

General cleanup would be nice, I see a bunch of outlines that cross into each other when they're not meant to, like when the collar of the bathrobe crosses into its wearer's face.

It seems like you drew it all at once on one layer. I'd recommend making each panel independent of each other and assembling them together later so you can space apart panels at a distance that doesn't feel crowded. It seems like you struggle a lot with portioning out the space you use for your strip. I see this issue with your use of text as well, it looks like you made the word bubbles first and had to fit the text to it. You should type out the text first and then create the word bubble around it.

I'm assuming you use Flash for your comic strips so I'm going to use that lingo for what I have to say next. When drawing the boundaries for your panels, I recommend simply getting the box tool and sizing it using the height and width dimensions in your properties panel instead of manually drawing it out using the brush tool. I see that your shading style is merely using the brush tool with white coloring you made transparent, I can tell because the shading often crosses over into other elements like black outlines. What I would do is I'd use the line tool to outline where you want the shading to be and attach the loose ends to edges of the object you want to add shading tool, break the outlines, fill in the color with the paint bucket tool & erase the outlines.

Another technique I'd recommend is, when making your individual panels, size them as big as possible or at least as big as you're comfortable at drafting. Then once you're done with that panel, you can shrink it down to its needed size when you bring it over to the main strip. It feels like you had to scrawl some segments as small as you could and certain details had to be left out to make room as I can see details only barely don't breach the sides, particularly with the top half of panels.

If you need your panels to be at a set of specific dimensions, what I would do is draw out all the panels as they need to be on the strip and then lock the height and width dimensions together in the properties panel before copying the panels over to new stages to fill them with content. That way, no matter what number you put into the width or height, it'll retain the same proportions as before.

I want you to look into a guy called "Iconoclast", power name: Jonathan Sweet for all the "don't do" aspects of a comic strip. I find that it's more revealing to look into the things one shouldn't do than what one should do. Subtracting a problem can add a lot.

I hope my advice helps.

ZRDR responds:

I use Gimp, but I can easily use this technical advice, anyway.

I'll PM you later with a more detailed response, I just wanted to let you know how happy I am to get such thoughtful insight.

I appreciate it a lot!

[Spawn]

Nice.

Lotsalmp responds:

Thanks

[Project Sketches - Hitler]

I love the expression on Hitler's face, it's that stern, betrayed looking face that asks the beholder "why?"

Keisok responds:

I based him off a photo and decided on a style for it. It just happened to create the most traumatized and disappointed expression ever seen on a human.

[C]

I've seen better anatomy from HiryuGouki. Her legs are stumps. I shouldn't even have to explain why this is so horrible. Her legs are a fourth of the length that they should be.

SenpaiLove responds:

I'm still new to this kind of angle when it comes to a character perspective so I'm not pro at it yet. I'm still currently learning anatomy so it's ganna be a while until i get things perfect.

[animation - snapshot]

Uh no

You don't get what Sukomi meant when he said "Great but you forgot to fill a frame", he meant that the character loses his entire color scheme near the end and his hair/shirt become pure white.

Sheller responds:

squint harder. It was a flash effect, as in a camera flash. That's why words appear on the same frame. I said I regretted not adding a few frames to the flash because everyone seems to have so much damn trouble recognizing it.

[Aware]

Looks good

No anatomical issues here.

Occluded responds:

WARNING TO EVERYONE:
DON'T EVER REVIEW THIS KID.

Unless you want every single piece you've done reviewed as some sort of crazy revenge. He doesn't really know what he's talking about, and he'll put up the pretense of being constructive so he can feel good about himself. But read his reviews and ask yourself. Does it seem like he's trying to help? Or like he's trying to look like he's trying to help.

Longer explanation here:
http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1211940/1
Seriously. All my work.

[Brackenwood Poster]

Just a few things

For one, her head isn't angled to be facing the flowering, why does she have her head tilted up like that? She appears to be looking off in the distance.

Also her left arm is pretty much just as long as her right arm, when the left one is supposed to be shorter because of the perspective she's facing.

Her wings are on at a completely different perspective than the perspective she's facing.

Not to be nit picky about the content but, why is she anorexic above her torso when she's not in her legs?

It's okay, I don't judge artwork based on how good the coloring looks but rather the artwork itself.

Occluded responds:

WARNING TO EVERYONE:
DON'T EVER REVIEW THIS KID.

Unless you want every single piece you've done reviewed as some sort of crazy revenge. He doesn't really know what he's talking about, and he'll put up the pretense of being constructive so he can feel good about himself. But read his reviews and ask yourself. Does it seem like he's trying to help? Or like he's trying to look like he's trying to help.

Longer explanation here:
http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1211940/1
Seriously. All my work.